Tuesday, April 13, 2010

getting into the game: the pitch

Authonomy's website has been down for most of today. Bummer. Pearl was at 146 before the site crashed. We'll see if it catches any momentum when the site gets back up.


So, I've been messing around with my pitch (the blurb that catches the attention of readers, making them want to crack open the book), and I'd love some feedback. So put on your 12-18 year old girl helmets, and step up to the plate...please! :)

The following is my tagline. What does it say to you? Does it work?

What if your prince is really a Norse god, and the end of the world is ruining your happily ever after?

Next is the current pitch:

When you're a seventeen-year-old Montana ranch girl, you can handle pretty much anything. Right?

Well...unless it's the hot guy who moves into your sleepy town and propels you into the turbulent world of Norse mythology -- a place where gods reign, giants destroy, best friends lie, and worlds end.

Oh, and where love between humans and gods is forbidden.

Which is a problem.

Especially when you discover what your best friend has known his entire life....


This is the previous pitch:

Mia Holden' Montana life is pretty average. She downhill skis, rides horses, dates (and breaks the heart of) the town rodeo champ, and hangs with her best guy friend, Tait. Ordinary. Until Iven Taylor moves into her sleepy town and propels her into the turbulent world of Norse mythology. A place where gods reign, giants destroy, best friends lie, and worlds end. Oh, and love between humans and gods is forbidden. A dilemma. Especially when Mia discovers what Tait has known his whole life.

Which one works better? Do either of them make you want to open the book and read? Any comments/suggestions would be most welcome!

Next I'll upload the book and ask for the same thing! :)

Just kidding!

1 comment:

  1. Oh, I definitely like the first one -- don't make any changes. "...the end of the world is ruining your happily ever after"? Come on! Doesn't get any more dramatic than that for a teen girl!

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